It was excellent for a first fic. I didn't see anything that needed tweaking. I hope your Jodie works up the courage to tell her dad she's tired of being used as a club to beat Rachel over the head with.
Would you know what happened to Animated Lust? I get a blank white window.
BTW, the link to 'Winter Is Here' doesn't work.
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