And naughty-spank and naughty-spank, and you've been bad in the tushie! Now...
by eonsinger
(It's a MST3K quote, I swear. ^^;)
More and more. Sorry if my notes sound overly sarcastic, since I was in that kind of a mood when I wrote these ^_^
>> huh? >>
WAND: As the token English major, I say, quit it.
MMK: I can't take you anywhere.
(I don't get the last line. "It" can't take you anywhere? Or is that an obscure
riff? :))
>> misc nitpick >>
> CHAPTER 6: LIU KANG/KITANA vs. GUILE/BLANKA
EMMY: Will the court please rise?
(I've always heard "Will the defendant please rise?", but that could just be
sheltered ol' me.)
MMK: I got it!
TIFF: Got what?
MMK: I know why the author does it. He's an Orz!
TIFF: Huh?
MMK <Guile>: You are not *happy cow*! You *make* the *sick joke*! It is
*dancing!*
EMMY <Kitana>: I will *pop* you into *many bubbles* with the *GO! GO!*
(MMK's line should read something more like "I just got why the author writes
like that! He must be an Orz!"
Plus, it's *happy camper*, not *happy cow*. The rest of the Orzspeak is right,
though. ^_^)
So I'm an SC2 fanboy. Shut up.
> "Ouch, that hurt."
(snickers)
(Should be [ALL snicker.])
> as possibly call specters from the Underworld, Sakura jumped in.
TIFF [Sakura]: You fool! You didn't call 1-800-COLLECT!
([Sakura] should be <Sakura>)
> "SHO-RYU-CANNON!"
WAND: Ignorance is no excuse of the law, Sakura.
(Should be "Ignorance of the law is no excuse")
> "That was Reptile," said Blanka.
TBS: I was close.
WAND: Like Hell you were.
(Hell generally isn't capitalized in that context)
> Ryu read and timed it perfectly,
Z-BOT [Ryu, with stopwatch]: *click* Booya! Book of Genesis, read
in only two minutes seven seconds!
> when Kitana was right above him, he performed his > > "SHO-RYU-KEN!"
MMK [Ryu, metal-style]: My love is like a flaming punch SHO-RYU-KEN!
My love is like a twirling uppercut SHO-RYU-KEN!
(more [] -> <> bloopers)
ALL [singing]: If you like pina coladas... and getting caught in the rain...
([], <>, yeah)
TBS: Another move that he
MMK: DOESN'T HAVE!
(Might need a dash after TBS's line, like "he --"
Not really necessary, just an anal grammar thing.)
WAND <monk>: Well, that's all my lines this chapter. Back to the clubhouse.
(Should be "all of my lines in this chapter.")
EMMY: Ken countered with an
TBS: ANTACID SPIT!
(Another dash possibility. Now I think about this, though, it could just be a matter of style.)
> "YOGA FLAME,"
MMK: By writing nasty things about Sean's mother in l33t and then
posting it at all the newsgroups.
(That's "to" all the newsgroups.)
> Unable to block, Ken was hit very hard by the raging fireballs
> Dhalsim blew.
WAND [Ken]: Nice one, dumbass!
EMMY [Sean]: Sorry! I thought it was the best way to--
WAND [Ken]: When I get home, I'm gonna promote Dan over you!
(INTENSE. BRACKET. SUBSTITUTING. ACTION. ;))
> "Look forward to meeting you again," said Sean.
TIFF: Have a nice or something. Whatever.
Z-BOT: Send pics of the kids...or something...
(Aaaand here.)
MMK: Well, why not? It happens when *Offspring* has an intermission.
EMMY: Well, I can't argue that.
(Argue ^with^ that.)