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Brand New Arts Lab - June 04, 2009

June 4 2009 at 5:02 PM
Nevada Kerr  (Login NevKerr)
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Spun

Wring me round that floral crown
That girdle of skulls
That evergreen wreath
For Earth is a woman
Whose wrath is sweet

Never mistaken
Never in error
Nothing's the matter
Truth is a terror

She turns and she tears
Unreasonably fair
Nothing's amiss
Nothing to fear

I red her writing
Writhing in pain
Her threads leave a mark
Her yarns leave a stain

Nothing unbroken
Nothing unclaimed
Just dreadful emotions
And human remains

A fabric of muscle
Membrane and nerve
The text of a brain
Its grain and curve

The sag and swag
Of kidney and heart
Folding and flapping
And falling apart

Bickering specters
In ribbons of flesh
In shreds and shivers
And slivers unblessed

Written by (c) Raven Drake
June 04, 2009

 
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Nevada Kerr
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One Edit - Thanks....

June 4 2009, 5:19 PM 

Spun


She turns and she tears

Unreasonably fair


Sounds better as "Nothing amiss"

Nothing to fear

 
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Re: Brand New Arts Lab - June 04, 2009

June 6 2009, 12:30 AM 

"Never mistaken
Never in error
Nothing's the matter
Truth is a terror"


I loved that part....
[linked image]


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I had a pet sin once - it got run over by a garbage truck.

 
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Art Murder
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I brought Krishna the head of King Kansa

June 7 2009, 1:21 AM 

My sister has a third eye and wears both a crown and a girdle of skulls, while over her shoulders is flung the pelt of a bull.

 
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Nevada
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Thanks - I Enjoyed That.....

June 8 2009, 9:09 PM 

In Greek mythology, Atropos (pronounced /ætrps/) (from Greek , "without turn") was one of the three Moirae, Goddesses of fate and destiny. Her Roman equivalent was Morta.

Atropos was the oldest of the Three Fates, and was known as the "inflexible" or "inevitable."

It was Atropos who chose the mechanism of death and ended the life of each mortal by cutting their thread with her "abhorred shears."

She worked along with her two sisters Clotho, who spun the thread, and Lachesis, who measured the length.

The Moirae or Moerae (in Greek the "apportioners", often called the The Fates), in Greek mythology, were the white-robed personifications of destiny (Roman equivalent: Parcae, euphemistically the "sparing ones", or Fata; also equivalent to the Germanic Norns). Their number became fixed at three.

The Greek word moira () literally means a part or portion, and by extension one's portion in life or destiny. They controlled the metaphorical thread of life of every mortal from birth to death (and beyond).

 
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Nevada
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Hi Mercury....

June 8 2009, 9:12 PM 

Glad you liked that part...

THE MOIRAI (or Moirae) were the goddesses of fate who personified the inescapable destiny of man. They assinged to every person his or her fate or share in the scheme of things. Their name means "Parts." "Shares" or "Alottted Portions."


Klotho, whose name meant 'Spinner', spinned the thread of life. Lakhesis, whose name meant 'Apportioner of Lots'--being derived from a word meaning to receive by lot--, measured the thread of life. Atropos (or Aisa), whose name meant 'She who cannot be turned', cut the thread of life.

 
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Art Murder
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Neoanalysis.

June 9 2009, 12:46 AM 

Most interesting Nev. Do you consider yourself a modern day Homer or perhaps a Marge wink.gif Either way, keep up the good work, it is indeed an Epic Cycle. I always look forward to your contributions.


    
This message has been edited by qazwsxedc7 on Jun 9, 2009 12:50 AM


 
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Mr Obvious
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Re: Neoanalysis.

June 9 2009, 3:37 AM 

nevada; you
write the
narrowest poems
I've ever seen.
Xeep up the
good work in
making zings
clear and distinct.
yours,
not mine







gramsci


 
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Nevada
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Thanks For the Analysis....

June 9 2009, 5:28 PM 

Hello Neo

As of late, I'm going for a certain dynamic tension.

Aiming to create poems that are concise and compact....

I want the poems to be tight, stretched as far as they can go but drawn out fully.

I'm glad you liked that one...

LOL....

Talk with you soon....

 
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Nevada
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Thanks Art Murder....

June 9 2009, 5:30 PM 

Glad you are enjoying them....

Write back anytime...

Nev

 
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